1) People who have experienced war know that it is not a game, and you can be killed.
2) To every child, someone going to war would be a hero who is brave, strong, and meets the enemey head on.
3) When the average person thinks about war, they always think about the glory of winning, but never see what happens if they lose.
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Mr. Twain, there are some great ideas in your topic sentences, but I have some concerns about language. First, get rid of "you" and, as much as possible, this mysterious "they."
Sentence one, try for something like this: To veterans, war is.... to non-soldiers, war is...
Sentence two, think about who this mysterious child is and what s/he's doing in your paper. I think you're talking about the myth of the perfect soldier?
Sentence three: Great idea! Needs some revision in the prose.
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